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All agree
Shakespeare was an excellent writer. According to Merriam-Webster, he is "celebrated for creating characters of great psychological depth
and for presenting in his plays virtually the entire range of human emotion
and experience." But,
sadly, the man and his
voice are gone.
Now,
almost four centuries later, our manner of speech
doesn't resemble his in the
least, and that's okay.
Unless we're writing historical fiction, such language sounds overly dramatic and
highly pretentious.
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EXAMPLE:
Remaining was out of the question, for the sun beckoned him beyond the windows of her Manhattan apartment. Rise! Rise! Yet he yearned to re-experience her there on the bed, to feel her alluring flesh against him once more before he bid a fond adieu. However, thoughts of the subsequent departure hung heavy on his heart. He abandoned the room without uttering a farewell. Was he fair?
CLEANED UP:
He
couldn't stay. The morning sun had already burst into her apartment
windows, and now glared at his watch. But oh, how he wanted to touch her,
to feel the softness of her skin once more before he went to work. If only
he were strong enough to withstand the look in her eye when he said
goodbye.
EXAMPLE:
Am I yet the first to discover the delicious irony? Catrina thought
to herself. Relief, is there not, in receiving condemnation from those who
yearn to stand behind this face? At first I did not see the heightened greenness. I labored under the delusion that they insulted my music because they did not understand it. And they did not understand it because they knew not the difference between an instrument and a bowel movement. Yet they call themselves music scholars. Indeed I
hoard the reviews! Indeed I revel in knowing that the very thing they proclaimed dead shall
long outlive them all!
CLEANED UP:
The first? Am I the only one who finds the delicious irony in getting kicked in the teeth by those who really want to stand in my place? It took a while, but I finally saw the jealousy. They hit below the belt because they couldn't touch the music, and they couldn't touch the music because they didn't know a keyboard from a turd. Music scholars--HA! So yeah, whenever I want a good laugh, I pull out the old reviews, relishing in the fact that what those critics predicted dead by 1972 will ultimately outlive every damned one of them.
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