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First person
narrative
enjoys the senses (sight, sound,
touch, smell and taste) of the person narrating. Nobody else. But if the story is as exciting as it should be, that POV
alone can keep the reader satisfied from beginning to
end.
It's enough.
Don't force
it to describe things it wasn't meant to know.
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EXAMPLE:
I kept walking, trying to contain my anger, unaware that behind me, Giles had just nodded to a waiting sniper in the
bushes.
CLEANED UP:
I kept walking, trying to contain my anger, when I felt a
sharp pain in my back.
EXAMPLE:
He took my hand and led me to the dancefloor. I wasn't aware
of anything but him. Not the well-dressed people. Not the multi-colored
flashing lights. Not the loud thumping music. I didn't see or hear any of
it.
CLEANED UP:
He took my hand and led me to the dancefloor. I was
transfixed.
EXAMPLE:
Blindfolded, things sounded louder than normal. Garbage trucks.
Horns. Voices. Sali couldn't take his mind off his sick
mother, and it showed.
CLEANED UP:
Blindfolded, things sounded
louder than normal. Garbage trucks. Horns. Voices. Sali told
Tony his mother was sick, and sounded upset.
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