Pools. We swim in them. We type in them. We sometimes ride to work in them. We add to them to make a bet. We join their ranks to manipulate finances. We even play it over a table with cue stick and balls.
The simple
one-syllable word has several meanings, but manages to juggle the workload quite nicely until... a love-struck writer comes along. Never in the history of romance has a single word been more overworked.
Fight the pool proliferation! Poke yourself in the pools of your eyes
when you feel the desire to compare
eyes to pools.
Example: Her eyes, twin pools of mystery, intrigued him.
Cleaned Up:
Her mysterious eyes intrigued him.
Example:
She felt lost in the pools of his eyes.
Cleaned Up:
She felt lost in his eyes.
Example:
Two strong black pools looked back at me and dove into
my soul.
Cleaned Up:
Black
eyes penetrated me.
Example:
Heat rose from his simmering pools.
Cleaned Up:
Heat rose from his simmering eyes.
Example: And how shall I ward off those pools of desire?
Cleaned Up:
And how shall I ward off that look of desire?
OUR CURRENT
CONTEST
Your
protagonist is about to have a day. He doesn't know it
yet, but it's going to be a day that, for him, will
live in infamy. A day she will point to, years later, as
the specific moment when something in her soul changed. It can be a
teeny tiny change or it can be a ginormous change. But
it has to occur in the light of day.
The first
line of your story must begin with:
The sun
rose...
The last
line of your story must end with:
...just as
the sun went down.
That which
occurs in between—be
it drama, comedy, mystery, romance, fantasy,
etc.—is
entirely up to you. What changes your dawn character to
the one we shall see at dusk?
$100
Story published in
The Verb Story Opinion,
also published in The Verb
Last
night, I dreamt I went to
Manderley again.
It
seemed to me I stood by the iron gate leading to the drive, and
for a while I could not enter, for the way was barred to me....
I called in my dream to the lodge-keeper, and had no answer, and
peering closer through the rusted spokes of the gate I saw that
the lodge was uninhabited....
Moonlight can play odd tricks upon
the fancy, even upon a dreamer's fancy. As I stood there, hushed
and still, I could swear that the house was not an empty shell
but lived and breathed as it had lived before.
Light came from the windows, the
curtains blew softly in the night air, and there, in the
library, the door would stand half open as we had left it, with
my handkerchief on the table beside the bowl of autumn roses.