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CLEANING UP PROSE

Pools. We swim in them. We type in them. We sometimes ride to work in them. We add to them to make a bet. We join their ranks to manipulate finances. We even play it over a table with cue stick and balls. 

The simple one-syllable word has several meanings, but manages to juggle the workload quite nicely until... a love-struck writer comes along. Never in the history of romance has a single word been more overworked. 

Fight the pool proliferation! Poke yourself in the pools of your eyes when you feel the desire to compare eyes to pools. 

 


 

Example: Her eyes, twin pools of mystery, intrigued him.
Cleaned Up: Her mysterious eyes intrigued him.

Example: She felt lost in the pools of his eyes.
Cleaned Up: She felt lost in his eyes.

Example: Two strong black pools looked back at me and dove into my soul.
Cleaned Up: Black eyes penetrated me.

Example: Heat rose from his simmering pools.
Cleaned Up: Heat rose from his simmering eyes.

Example: And how shall I ward off those pools of desire?
Cleaned Up: And how shall I ward off that look of desire?

 

OUR CURRENT CONTEST

Your protagonist is about to have a day. He doesn't know it yet, but it's going to be a day that, for him, will live in infamy. A day she will point to, years later, as the specific moment when something in her soul changed. It can be a teeny tiny change or it can be a ginormous change. But it has to occur in the light of day.

The first line of your story must begin with: The sun rose...

The last line of your story must end with: ...just as the sun went down.

That which occurs in betweenbe it drama, comedy, mystery, romance, fantasy, etc.is entirely up to you. What changes your dawn character to the one we shall see at dusk?

 
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Story published in The Verb
 Story Opinion, also published in The Verb

 

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SAMPLE OF EXCELLENCE

Last night, I dreamt I went to Manderley again. It seemed to me I stood by the iron gate leading to the drive, and for a while I could not enter, for the way was barred to me.... I called in my dream to the lodge-keeper, and had no answer, and peering closer through the rusted spokes of the gate I saw that the lodge was uninhabited....  

Moonlight can play odd tricks upon the fancy, even upon a dreamer's fancy. As I stood there, hushed and still, I could swear that the house was not an empty shell but lived and breathed as it had lived before.

Light came from the windows, the curtains blew softly in the night air, and there, in the library, the door would stand half open as we had left it, with my handkerchief on the table beside the bowl of autumn roses.   
 

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