Terms such as could
of, should of, would of sound fine when they roll off a
character's
tongue, but they look pure amateurish when they appear in a writer's narrative.
What
we’re really searching for are the contractions of
could have, should have, would have.
Let's keep an eye out for this itty bitty troublemaker lest our narrative
appears, well, uncharacteristic of a professional storyteller.
Example: He
didn’t know what he clocked, but he was sure he could of beaten Clara.
Cleaned Up:
He
didn’t know what he clocked, but he was sure he could’ve beaten Clara.
Example: Darkness
was as it should of been the night she went away.
Cleaned Up:
Darkness
was as it should’ve been the night she went away.
Example:
If
I’d walked out then, I would of had it all.
Cleaned Up:
If
I’d walked out then, I would’ve had it all.
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Sure,
anyone can write a 500,000-word novel, but a 500-word
short story with a beginning, a middle and an ending?
Now that requires skill. No dawdling. Every word
counts.
Yep.
Every. Single. Word.
So send
those adjectives packing and kick those adverbs to the
curb. Oh, and while you're at it, gaze upon the drawing
for inspiration because your milieu must include
snow.
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Story Opinion,
also published in The VERB
Mann
could not allow himself to accept
what apparently had taken place. It had to be a coincidence. The
truck driver couldn't have blocked his way on purpose. He waited
for more than a minute, then flicked down the turn-indicator
lever to make his intentions perfectly clear and, depressing the
accelerator pedal, steered again into the eastbound lane.
Immediately, the truck
shifted, barring his way....
He returned to the westbound lane, shaking his head as the truck
swung back in front of him....
Impulsively, he sped
into the eastbound lane again. To his surprise, the truck driver
did not pull over. Instead, the driver stuck his left arm out
and waved him on. Mann started pushing down on the accelerator.
He let up on the pedal with a gasp and jerked the
steering wheel around, raking back behind the truck so quickly
that his car began to fishtail. He was fighting to control its
zigzag whipping when a blue convertible shot by him in the
opposite lane....
Mann was sucking breath
in through his mouth. His heart was pounding almost painfully.
My God! He wanted me to hit that car head on!
The idea seemed beyond
his comprehension. On a California highway on a Thursday
morning? Why?